Incest Ek bechara (एक बेचारा)

[Dildar]

Nice update

 

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-R-A-V-A-N- kaha par ho bhai kuch javab hi nahi de rahe lag raha hai ki mera bolna pasand na aya na aya ho to bata dijiyega apun firse chup

 

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-R-A-V-A-N- kaha par ho bhai kuch javab hi nahi de rahe lag raha hai ki mera bolna pasand na aya na aya ho to bata dijiyega apun firse chup

Bhai itna bologe to bura lgega na

 

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Bhai itna bologe to bura lgega na

maine galat to nahi bola bhai
ab sach bolne pe bhi ye hal hai to shant rahne mai hi bhalai hai

 

[Rahul]

maine galat to nahi bola bhai
ab sach bolne pe bhi ye hal hai to shant rahne mai hi bhalai hai

Koi bhi faisla writer ke reply ke baad kiya karo sikayat unse hui to baat unki gaur kariye

 

[Prem Pujari]

Koi bhi faisla writer ke reply ke baad kiya karo sikayat unse hui to baat unki gaur kariye

2 din hogaye bhai koi reply nahi aya

 

[Rahul]

2 din hogaye bhai koi reply nahi aya

ye baat to hai lekin ek baat aur meko lagta ho sakta hai unko sahi jabaab nai mil pa raha ho waise agar koi baat abhi chut gayi hai to usko baad me bhi dikha sakte hain..I think writer ki ye first story hai to kuch point miss ho jate hain lekin usko sametna koi muskil nai hai ab jab wo reply degen tab pata chalega ki akhir baat kya hai

 

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maine galat to nahi bola bhai
ab sach bolne pe bhi ye hal hai to shant rahne mai hi bhalai hai

Sir ji bat shant rahne ki nhi hai suggestions dijiye

 

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ye baat to hai lekin ek baat aur meko lagta ho sakta hai unko sahi jabaab nai mil pa raha ho waise agar koi baat abhi chut gayi hai to usko baad me bhi dikha sakte hain..I think writer ki ye first story hai to kuch point miss ho jate hain lekin usko sametna koi muskil nai hai ab jab wo reply degen tab pata chalega ki akhir baat kya hai

kaise samet sakte hai uske bhi 2 point same reply mai hai bhai

 

[-R-A-V-A-N-]

Nice update

Bhai itna bologe to bura lgega na

Rohan to bahut bada aadmi ban gawa apne dimaag ke sahare aur sayad kismat bhi meharbaan hui uspar ab dekhte hain aage kya hota hai

sunil uncle dadi ke room mai gaye the aur ek dum se har jagah ki light jana
koi hadsa darsata par us chiz ko likhne ke bajaye sidhe neha puri tarah se tut chuki thi
pagla gaye ho gya writer mahodaya ya dimag mai alag khichdi bana rahe ho ya 40 ko padh ke update likha ya 40 b update likhne se pehle padha hi nahi
in sawalo ke jawaj jarur dijiyega
dusra update padhna shuru hi kar raha tha ki pehli line padhte hi dimag khanak gaya

Jo bhi hua achcha hua bhala tum bole to sahi bhai warna tumne kuch bhi nai comment karna tha waise khusi hui aapko dekhkar

flashback to thik tha
par kahani kisi point par chodi aur pichle point se start kar di

mai 40 b ke update ke bad bhi bola tha bhai jo chiz mujhe lagi thi ki sheetal ko jo bhram dikha wo sach hone jaa raha hai ki kishan ki ladai ho rahi hai par yaha to blunder kar rakha hai ab koi kyu aise karega

ek do karan ssamjh mai aye unhe yaha par likh raha hu

1. sunil ko abhash hua ki samay nikat hai aur usi samay kuch aur abhas hua ho jiski wajah se sunil turant apni mata ke pass gaye
2. ya sun ki mata ko andhere se dar lagta hai to sunil is wajah se bhage
3. ya writer mahoday ne kahi par galti ki hai aur blunder mistake

pehle do point hai to chalega par agar tisra hai to writer ko dand diya jaye kyunki choti galti nahi hai

galtiya :-

1. rat ko londa bahar gaya chalo khun garam hai nikal gaya par gaya kaha aur hua kya
2. sunil kyu ghabra gaya
3. neha ke sath bat hui wahi se 41 update chalu kar diya matlab ki 40(b) jaye kahi bhi humme matlab nahi(
   Spoiler: mere kahne ka matlab

   update 40 b jaye gand marwane
   )
4. kishan ke gahrwalo ki vidai to dikhai hi nahi
5. rachna ka kya hua ye to age bhi samajh mai ajayega ye itni badi blunder nahi hai

par ghar wale chup chap chale gaye ye to nahi ho sakta kisi ki to shamat aai hoti ya kuch aur
is update ko 42 ya 43 mai ana chahiye tha writer mahodaya lagta hai office ki thakawat yaha par nikal gaye

par hum kon hote hai bolne wale jaise writer ki marjji waise chalaye kahani

Rahul bhai ek request hai apka second comment tha kahani par to uski jagah is kahani ka index hi banwa dijiye taki naye ane wale bandhuo ki madad ho jati kyunki kai bande update na milne ke karan hi kahani ko chod dete hai chahe unka interest ho us kahani mai

Hum apne man se index add na kar sakte hain uske liye agar writer khud index nahi add kar sakta to story ki first post par report me index request daal de ya kisi staaf ko private massage kare fir uska kaam ho jayega

are dalvado bhaiya kahe bache ki jan le rahe ho

Nice update

-R-A-V-A-N- kaha par ho bhai kuch javab hi nahi de rahe lag raha hai ki mera bolna pasand na aya na aya ho to bata dijiyega apun firse chup

Bhai itna bologe to bura lgega na

maine galat to nahi bola bhai
ab sach bolne pe bhi ye hal hai to shant rahne mai hi bhalai hai

Koi bhi faisla writer ke reply ke baad kiya karo sikayat unse hui to baat unki gaur kariye

2 din hogaye bhai koi reply nahi aya

ye baat to hai lekin ek baat aur meko lagta ho sakta hai unko sahi jabaab nai mil pa raha ho waise agar koi baat abhi chut gayi hai to usko baad me bhi dikha sakte hain..I think writer ki ye first story hai to kuch point miss ho jate hain lekin usko sametna koi muskil nai hai ab jab wo reply degen tab pata chalega ki akhir baat kya hai

Sir ji bat shant rahne ki nhi hai suggestions dijiye

kaise samet sakte hai uske bhi 2 point same reply mai hai bhai

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